Dont You Dare

Hey there,

I thought I could write a critique to your little comic. I like it realy much, its a funny idea. <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="15" height="15" alt="" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="390" title=" (Smile)"/>

I don't want to bore you to death, so I start know with my critique.
So your speech bubbles are good, but I have the feeling, that you tried not to destroy the pictures, thats okay but you have plenty of space for them. In the first Picture you could have done youre speech bublle in the right upper edge, so that you could make the picture be seen without making it transparent.

Your speechbubbles could go like this " Hey
I might
get
a
bit late."

You know what I mean, yeah? You could better organise them around the pictures. Arrows would be good too, to that the read could know where to start and in which direction he have to read.

<img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="15" height="15" alt="" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="390" title=" (Smile)"/> I realy adore your idea of crashing a car into the wall <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="15" height="15" alt="" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="390" title=" (Smile)"/> Try to bent the VROOM Sound a little bit and make the letters in a diffrent Size that would make it better looking. <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="15" height="15" alt="" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="390" title=" (Smile)"/>

The last picture would look better if you would turn it horizontal, because the car is going from the left in the first picture and you would give it the impression of getting from one site <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="15" height="15" alt="" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="390" title=" (Smile)"/>

So, I hope I could help you with my critique. I have to say that it is not to make everything bad in your comic, I just want to help you with my critique and I hope you will keep up the good work <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="15" height="15" alt="" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="390" title=" (Smile)"/>